Achieved
What I set out to achieve
Here I am, triumphant
At the peak
Here I am, alone
At the peak.
Without you
My success, my position
Is just empty imagination.
Without you
My emptiness, my isolation
Is my only real confrontation.
Without you.
You, were my hope
My dream, My despair
Without you
I have nothing but regret
My hopes dashed.
My dreams scattered.
My despair resonated.
Words can't do justice
To the pain
That I feel inside
'Why?' I ask myself
Do I still think of you?
Rhetorical question
For I know
There's no me without you
For I know
There's no you without me too!
now there's a story behind this, dnt worry it ain't no my story! a friend of mine asked me to compose a poem for him for his girl with a given situation... i gave him back after three days. he asked me how much time did i take on writing the verses i said 10 minutes he exclaimed "only?" i replied "i spent three days preparing for it!"
p.s. he has liked it and will shortly be presented to his friend.. m looking frwd to knw if my lines can win a heart!





20 comments:
As I read in other comments, your words could easily be put to lyrics. We probably can imagine our own melodies, and our lives add the notes to the harmony.
hey good one friend..
tis reminds the same thing yea..I wrote a poem for my friend for his girl..you know what it was a surprise that fortunately she flagged green for my friend and the poem ;)
good to see ya helping ur friend's love....
I loved esp. the last para
//Words can't do justice
To the pain//
happy blogging
Prema
Nice poem parv. All the best to your friend and your poem. :)
It's a good poem hopefully it will win her over.
Its totally awesome.
@6degrees really?? lyrics of sum pop song?? i listen to rap to difficult to accept tht m writing pop songs!!!
and you are most welcum to add your melodies..
@ resonator hahaha!! luks like we poets are here god-send to help jilted lovers!!
god help us!!! nxt tym m askng fr payment fr my services!!
@ramesh thnx buddy! and yeah he needs gud wishes!!
@art and poetry.. i guess so too!
@priya finally a rockng commnt frm you!! thnx!!
last two lines jus won my heart so it will definatey work.. dont worriez
@freeky thnx buddy.. hope it does!!
am again late to reply...i guess u don mind..
hmmm "good poem.." i think this has been kinda cliche for u i guess...
So, social service huh..... keep it up..
anywys i got kinda connected to it...
anyways.. i wish ur frnd gets it right...
cheers!!!
peace!!!
u hav read that sign on highways--
"durghatna se der bhali"!!!
dnt wrry dude better late that never...
nd cliche??? okk i guess.. may b..
:) this is really a nice poem.. I can't compose a poem if I am given a situation with the proper feel.. unless and until I relate with it .. if you do not relate either and still managed to pen it .. its quite incredible.
it's a beautful love poem to me. great work. 10 minutes, that probably would have taken me days. sometimes we put so much into our writings when really the simpliest sayings will do.
@aria
i do agree with you.. bt think in that case all the actors though inacting a fictional character are sort of faking themselves too..
the poets who write poetry abt sum historical events or sum historical figure present their own view regarding the events and the person..
i related to the person's agony and dissapointment and present my own view regarding his state of mind..
@natural
i agree with you... and poetry jst happens to me and in a flow everythng happens and a song is composed!
bro...thnx a ton...
but ur frnd doesnt have enough guts to present it...
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